That was really good foreshadowing. I got the sense that one was the other’s ghost (or something) but it wasn’t overpowering. It was intriguing and kept me following the path.
Speaking of paths, I really liked the photographs of the Japanese alleys, I couldn’t really picture them based on my travel experiences.
I think my favorite part was that this spirit was able to be such a close companion to this troubled boy. I FELT that warmth and it was wonderful.
Hi Timothy! Thanks so much for the feedback. Tbh, I was pretty worried that it'd be too confusing or challenging to catch the fact that they're the same person. Glad to hear the foreshadowing worked well! Also, capturing the warmth between Haruki and Taiyo was my fave part of the writing process. I plan to share a couple more stories featuring unconventional relationships soon!
Amazing story. Thank you. Beautifully done. I did kind of figure out that they were each other. But the unanswered questions - why did this cycle begin? Can it ever stop?
That was really good foreshadowing. I got the sense that one was the other’s ghost (or something) but it wasn’t overpowering. It was intriguing and kept me following the path.
Speaking of paths, I really liked the photographs of the Japanese alleys, I couldn’t really picture them based on my travel experiences.
I think my favorite part was that this spirit was able to be such a close companion to this troubled boy. I FELT that warmth and it was wonderful.
Hi Timothy! Thanks so much for the feedback. Tbh, I was pretty worried that it'd be too confusing or challenging to catch the fact that they're the same person. Glad to hear the foreshadowing worked well! Also, capturing the warmth between Haruki and Taiyo was my fave part of the writing process. I plan to share a couple more stories featuring unconventional relationships soon!
Holy crap.
Amazing story. Thank you. Beautifully done. I did kind of figure out that they were each other. But the unanswered questions - why did this cycle begin? Can it ever stop?
I'll be thinking about this story for a while.
Thank you Mark! And great questions. I’d thought about them myself as I was writing but decided to leave them up to the reader’s imagination.